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              Would that I had ne’r set thy course to indulgence.

              Won the Kraken’s fractured slumber to thine own, the titan’s curse thrives not but to dethrone, turned grim, yet void of true intone.


               


               My hand is seldom sought from Albion, framed in bare sky, seems cause permits awed spectacles. For calm the waves, a gentle hum, and to the rain, no dance had come. The sails breathe still, the mast serene, my face doth bathed in sweet unseen. Hark! The island, rare to spy, for but resides deserted brine, and waves do all, save intertwine. Let anchor loose and ropes to fly, hail thy god’s who aid us nigh! Whilst I do gather men anew, dock safe the vessel, bid adieu.

Ashore we lye, strange land be this? Methinks we’ve failed to see amiss?

Thence thunder struck, and earth did quake, ash from smothered flames did shake, and lo, the dreaded serpent’s wake! Cling close to wood, drink not the sea; perhaps death’s not yet come for me! Weary to some true intent, to rid myself of cruel lament, be this the day I last repent? The demon’s eye eased on another, one of youth, in blood, a brother. Imposed by fear of earthly flesh, stirred of by thoughts of lust, afresh, I thrust him far, to fiends enmesh. See Yet! The ill assault did shift! My kin stood firm, tis’ I who drift, a simple stroke, deemed all but swift. Stalked by evil, dwindled near, I watch my ship, as I adhere, into the depths, endless abyss, carved to thy mind, to disappear.

Thus, at long last, envisioned truths have steered alas, for though mine eyes hold not regret, impurities dark silhouette.
©2003-2009 ~theinquisitions
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Sacrifice a life for a life unsaved– Impurity thrives.

My words lack sense to any but me, so here’s my translation.

A Kraken is, put bluntly, a sea monster. A serpent in fables from….surprise surprise, the medieval time period in the island of Irene, Gaul and the Nordic lands. Said to be an immense sea dwelling serpent that sinks ships. In this case, Men from Albion (Celtic island) travel the sea, weary, spot an island, which is really a Kraken come to surface. The narrating crewmember thinks to throw his brother (eyed by the serpent) overboard to save his own life, himself dying in the process.


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Well wrought tale! You are a writer worthy of continued observation.
very good. :thumbsup: :D

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the ending is beautiful.. :jawdrop: this is really good, your rhyming scheme intrigues me. i agree with the first comment - you are definitely a writer worthy of continued observation :heart: also, the plot is excellent. i like this very much :hug:
That was absolutely wonderful. Your rhyming is indeed interesting... but I really like it. :)

You are an awesome writer. :) Your ideas are so... original and very well done. :)

I loved this tale! I enjoyed every second! :)
i am waiting to 'not' be amazed by you!!!

lets pray that day never comes. :)

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amazing plot, amazing words, amazing imagery, wow. you have a lot of talent. :hug:

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I read it. lol. FINALLY.

Your descriptions come alive and that's what makes this such a good piece. Good job.
I'm being continually surprised by how well you always manage to keep the archaic tone flowing well, particularly in this instance. Loved the line "The demon’s eye eased on another, one of youth, in blood, a brother" - in fact, the rhythm and rhyme schemes throughout the piece are all brilliant. I'm awed. That doesn't happen often. =P

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