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Am I a serf working your land now,
Growing your fare?
Will you cut off my ear and keep me?
Or am I the slave master and you the slave
In that case, I may do with you as I like,
But I don’t enjoy it as I thought I might,
You are a submissive slave,
And you would have to cut off my ear, earl or baron or lord of the manor,
Though I may not resist once you show me the knife.

Perhaps I only lost my ear in an alehouse brawl then.
But I have no hair to hide the wound.
When people look on me, they will think me a serf always.
But a rebellious slave may walk the streets aloof
You need only steal or kill or work with honesty
With a ripe ear when you visit the alehouse

Earl or baron or lord of the manor, I am not honest.
I steal and kill and you work with honesty
No, you would not cut off my ear if I handed you the knife and readied myself
But if I am the slave master, and you my meek slave,
I think you would not rebel.
I think you would hand me the knife and ready yourself.
Would I cut it off and cast you aside?
No, I would work your land well without my ear,
But then, I am not honest.
©2006-2008 ~theinquisitions
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=NeoPiter:iconNeoPiter: May 14, 2006, 4:15:04 AM
You write really good. I identify with some. Congrats :)

It's good to have you back here eheh :)

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~jhxmt:iconjhxmt: May 24, 2006, 5:09:44 AM
I love the type of world you seem to be building up here, but I'll confess to getting a little confused as to who the narrator was and to whom they were speaking. The hypothetical 'If I am the slave master' segments tripped me up simply on that basis.

That aside, however, I really enjoyed reading it. It reads as being very vocal, and if I weren't at work at the moment I'd be tempted to try reading it aloud to see how easily it trips off the tongue. ;)

Nice work. Good to have you back and writing.

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